Thanks very much to Betsy, who resides in Italy.
Tina Marie Smith made an excellent comment about my post on POV, head-hopping and author intrusion.
The examples I used, including the example showing author intrusion, were all written in the first person because they were taken from my novel, Redneck P.I.
Here are some samples of author intrusion from my upcoming novel, Way Out of Line, which is written in the third person.
Thanks, Tina Marie, hope that cleared it up.
To me, CreateSpace has to be the greatest thing that ever happened to writers.
If you want to see your book in print, you don’t have to pay a single penny to publish it on Amazon. Sweat equity–yes. Out of pocket expenses–no.
I’m in the process of preparing the print version of Way Out of Line
in CreateSpace to publish at the same time it goes live in e-format on Uncial Press — http://www.uncialpress.com.
This is not the first book I’ve published on CreateSpace, so I know the ropes now. The first step was to edit and edit and re-check my manuscript until I was as certain as I could be it is error-free.
Signed into CreateSpace, I added Way Out of Line to my list of books and the computer issued the ISBN’s. I can’t figure out why anyone would want a custom ISBN, but the option is there, so I guess some people choose it for whatever reason.
Next, I chose the most popular mass market paperback size recommended on the site, and downloaded the template. It’s imperative you use the template because the margins change in width on each alternate page. I copied and pasted the entire manuscript onto the template.
I added my name and the book’s name to the headers and made certain the page numbers on the footer was correct. I went through the entire manuscript again, making sure every new chapter started in the right place on the page.
I uploaded the manuscript the first time in Word format and CreateSpace converted it into Adobe. The automated checker went through it and found one error. The font I used was not embedded. This was the font on the title page provided by CreateSpace in the template, so I clicked on the link that tells you how to embed the fonts. It didn’t work.
The online proof makes it really easy to spot errors, and I found some.
I have two monitors on my PC, which makes it a lot easier to go through the errors online on the left and correct them in my Word document on the right.
I converted it to pdf before uploading it the next time, thinking maybe the fonts would be embedded if I did it that way. They weren’t, and I had to upload it four times in all, because each time something moved to where it shouldn’t have moved and I had to fix it in Word. The fonts are still not embedded, but the manuscript is uploaded and formatted.
Creating the cover is the next task.
Have you ever had an editor tell you to tighten your writing?
When I submitted my first novel to several publishers, a couple of them came back with the comment that it was not tight enough for them. I had no clue what they meant, and in those days the Internet was still in its infancy. I couldn’t simply Google “tight writing” and find out.
I only really started to understand when I wrote articles for eHow.com. Every piece was edited prior to publication, and some of those copy editors were extremely helpful and kind. I learned a lot from them. When my novel “Redneck P.I.” was accepted by Uncial Press, my editor Jude added to my knowledge.
Tight writing is a term used to describe writing so that every word counts and no words are unnecessary. This is loose–here is a tighter version–
Tight writing means make every word count.
Everyone uses certain words more than is necessary. Mine are “that” and “disappeared”. While editing my work, I now use the “search and replace” application in Word to locate and change them. Often they are totally unnecessary and removing them tightens the writing.
Louis L’Amour is one of my favorite authors, and a very great writer. His word is “suddenly” and whenever I read a piece he wrote I usually find if “suddenly” was taken out, the effect of the sentence wouldn’t change.
Strong Verbs–Use active verbs and strong nouns and avoid passive voice. Advice like this was difficult for me to understand at first, but I know now what it means. Instead of writing: A car was stopped by a police officer in front of them. It should be:
A police officer stopped the car in front of them. (Subject-verb-object).
Also, a good writer should never use “there were, they are, etc.”
There were three people in the car—should be–Three people occupied the car.
Adverbs–Famous and successful writers of the past used adverbs and adjectives and their work included long, descriptive passages. Today’s reader prefers action, and publishers consider excessive use of adverbs and adjectives to be the mark of an amateur. Do not use “The sun shone warmly.” Everyone knows the sun is warm.
Redundancy–This describes the use of two or more words when you only need one, as in armed gunman, blend together, and round in shape. Remove one of the redundant words to tighten your work.
I’m no expert, but I’m learning, and I want to be as good as I possibly can.
Tight writing comes with practice and editing. Write your story first and go back and edit, edit, edit to get it as good as you possibly can.
Do you know whose mind is processing and telling the story of the events unfolding at any given place in your novel? Understanding POV or Point of View is extremely important for any fiction writer who wants to be successful.
The first thing to understand is that each character in your novel sees things differently, and has his or her own voice. Two people from totally different backgrounds describing the same scene would use different language and would see the scene from a totally different perspective.
In my novel, Redneck P.I., Twila tells the story like this:
Author Intrusion is the term used when the POV is that of the author.
In this passage, Trent, the spoiled teenage girl in my upcoming novel, Way Out of Line is forced to go to a psychologist:
Here’s how it looks now after my editor helped me show it only from Trent’s POV:
Trent picked at her finger nails. I hate him already. I just hope this goes quickly. I’m not coming again.
The addition of the word “obviously” is necessary, because Trent can only guess why he is waiting. The second passage, if used as it is written in the first example is Author Intrusion–like someone else is telling the story. A big no-no in modern writing.
I recently read an extremely valuable article, which categorized three specific items that must be present in the very first paragraph of any novel.
- The protagonist–the person with whom you want readers to identify, and whose point of view is featured in most parts of the book.
- The incident that triggers the events that take place in the story. It is not a good idea to start a novel with a passive scene. Readers are far more likely to want to read on if something exciting is happening, especially if it creates questions.
- A hint at the protagonist’s core need. There is a very good reason for this. It gives the author a framework to work around, and that core need must be fulfilled in some way or another for the story to be successful.
Way Out of Line is having all the final formatting done before its release in May. I’ve done all the formatting for CreateSpace for the print version and posted the trailer on Youtube here http://youtu.be/p_oy-GzOmDQ
The only task I still have to undertake is the cover. I have to decide whether to buy the cover design from my publisher Uncial Press, who only publish e-books, or design my own. I would prefer to have the same cover design but it will depend on the cost.
Kick Assitude, the sequel to Redneck P.I. is with my publisher awaiting review.
Time to start working on To the Limit.(I might change the title). I wrote this first draft several years ago and have forgotten most of it, so I am enjoying re-visiting it and getting it into shape. This is the part I love about writing and I can get lost for hours, totally oblivious of anything going on around me.
This book is about a veterinarian who has moved to a small, remote town in Colorado to escape her violent past. When violence impacts her life again, everything she has worked for will be lost unless she confronts it and faces it head on. Of course there is a very sexy man in the mix–two in this one.
I am thrilled to be writing about one of my greatest loves, horses, dogs and cats. (Kick Assitude also features a dog that rides on Twila’s Harley with her.)
Young adults feel romantic love too.
Yay! My book trailer is completed and live on Youtube!
Move your mouse to the right of this text to find the link — Way Out of Line Trailer
I’m lucky I have PowerPoint 2010 now. I had 2007 before, and it did not offer the option to convert the ppt presentation to a video.
I had to search for royalty free pictures, which I found on some Creative Commons sites–where photographers display their pictures and license them for commercial or non-commercial reproduction.
Music for commercial use is also available free. I really wanted something like African drums, and I may change the music score later, but I have not so far been able to find the perfect sound track. I went with danosongs.com again because they offer the best choice and the music is formatted correctly for upload to Youtube. I found free music on other sites but when I tried to insert them into my presentation they were not the correct file type.
I hope it sparks the imagination and makes viewers want to read the book!